Team 4 – Team Paradise - NCL Phase One – 78 Please review the comments below and make the necessary corrections prior to submitting the complete paper in Phase Six. (Please do not wait.) Format  Please attribute (and cite) all quotes.  “however” is not a conjunction and cannot be used to join two sentences.  Do not have headings floating at the bottom of the page.  All paraphrased material must be cited. Otherwise, this is plagiarism!  Blogs are not appropriate sources (see Disney).  Title on some tables were not in the correct format.  All tables with information from another source must be cited. Industry– Well done! Good figures. See comments below: Format – In one place you say Figure 1, rather than Figure 1-1. Financials – What was the yearly revenues for 2016? How did this compare to previous years? See IBISWorld in NSU library databases: http://clients1.ibisworld.com.ezproxylocal.library.nova.edu/reports/us/industry/currentperformance.aspx?entid=1138 Major Players–Good start. Please address the comments below:  What is the market share of each of the major players? See IBISWorld in the NSU library databases: http://clients1.ibisworld.com.ezproxylocal.library.nova.edu/reports/us/industry/majorcompanies.aspx?entid=1138  Include a chart showing the shares and discuss in the paper. Carnival– Well done!  Format, Grammar and Punctuation – o Each table needs a title with the company name in it. o Titles need to be cited. o Table 1-1 is actually two tables and needs to be separated. o Mission – You must attribute the quote. You cannot just throw it in there. o Shouldn’t it be Carnival’s?  Financials – You talk about the increase in revenue, but what was the actual revenue in 2016? It is in the table, but must be discussed in the body of the paper.  What about Other Important Factors? Current news? Royal Caribbean–There is some good information here, but there is a real problem with the lack of citation. Please address the comments below:  All paraphrased material must be cited. Otherwise, this is plagiarism!  Format – o Table needs to be properly cited and titled.  History – Only one sentence here is on history. Please expand. Who founded the company? What happened between 1968 until now?  Financials – o What about the revenues and profits for 2016. Go to Mergent Online in the NSU databases, pull up your company and look at the annual financial reports. o The table is very good. However, you need to discuss the 2016 revenues and profits and the change from previous years in the body of the paper and refer to your table.  Talent Management Philosophy –Expand. o You say according to the website. What website? Not only do you not say, what website, but there is no citation! NCL– Good start. Please address the following comments:  Format – o The first paragraph should go before history.  History – Only two sentences were actually history. Please expand.  Financials – Good table. Discuss the profits (net income in the body of the paper). Disney Cruise Line –  Major Plagiarism issues- o History - Not only is much this information paraphrased without citations, but some of it is taken word-for-word without quotes or citations. o Financial – You have a lot of financial information, but not citations showing where you go this information. o Other Important factors – No citations.  BLOGS are not appropriate sources.  Format – o Title of Table 1-3 and 1-4 are not in the correct format (see Table 1-2 for correct format) and the title should not have a box around it. o Tables must be cited at the bottom.  Financials – All of information is included in the tables, but you must discuss the 2016 annual revenues and profits (net income) and changes over previous years in the body of the paper and refer to the appropriate table.  Talent Management Philosophy – You start by talking about Universal Orlando’s mission statement???? You then have a long paragraph about Universal Orlando and a short paragraph about Disney. You need to remove Universal and find more information on Disney’s talent management.  Other factors – What is the latest news? Your Company– NCL Phase Two – Grade 90 Well done. Please address the comments below prior to submitting your completed project in Phase Six. Format  Include position title in titles of appropriate tables. Ex. Job Description for Registration Supervisor  Each table needs a paragraph of introduction so that the reader knows why it is there.  Level 2 headings are in Level 3 format. Posting – Good information. Good choice of position. You will be working with this position of a Reservation Supervisor position located in Miami at NCL throughout the rest of the project.  This section should be in its own section with a level one heading. This is not part of the Job Analysis.  You must include the URL.  Indicate where the position is located.  Job Analysis –O*NET is a good source, but was it your only source? What about the Occupational Handbook from the BLS? Job Description – Good! Please address the following issues:  Format - This table needs a paragraph of introduction so that the reader knows why it is there.  Relationships – o Whom do they report to? Please move this here. o List who the have relationships with inside and outside of the company. Do not write “Develops a positive relationship.” o I am sure that a reservation supervisor does not have a relationship with all executives. The CEO? Which executive would this position fall under. o Coaching would fall under duties, not here, though they would have relationships with reservation agents.  Authority – What else do they have authority over? Reservation equipment or software?  Standards of Performance – These look like K,S,A’s. These should be measurable standards that they will be held to. Essential Competencies – Excellent table! Please address the following:  Format – o This section needs a level one heading.  Adjust “Description of Work” accordingly. o Please attribute (not just cite) all quotes. Job Specifications – Good! Please address the following:  Format – o This table needs to be numbered and titled. o This table needs a paragraph of introduction so that the reader knows why it is there.  Knowledge: o Languages belong under skills. What languages would you like them to have? (desired) o Shouldn’t they have knowledge of reservations systems? o How much experience would you like them to have as a reservationist and/or supervisor? Job Requirements Matrix- Well done! Please address the comments below.  Format – When there is more that one task for a given duty, be sure to delineate each task. (You could number them within the cell.) Salary – Well done!  Format – o Level 2 headings are in level 3 format. o After your main heading (Expected Salary Range), you need a brief introduction prior to your level 2 heading (Nationally). o It should say “National Salaries” and “Local Salaries,” not “Nationally” and “Locally.” o Incomplete sentence at the end of the first paragraph.  Salaries – When discussing the salaries, you must cite your information as well as refer to your table.  Based on all this research, what should the salary range for this position be (not necessarily what NCL is currently paying).