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s5030563_7011CAL_Final_Research_Report
GRADEMARK REPORT
GENERAL COMMENTS
Instructor
Report has signif icant weaknesses and will need
to be resubmitted. Please see my comments intext f or detailed f eedback.
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Comment 1
This is vague and looks like it's going to be descriptive.
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Vague
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Comment 5
Insuf f icient inf ormation in f ooter.
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Run-on Sentence
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NAE
Non-Academic English
Error example: She’s gonna describe something really
*cool.
The style or words are inappropriate f or an academic piece of writing.
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nclear
The meaning is not clear and your tutor does not understand it
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Executive summary appears to be basically relevant but expression is a problem and has
negative impact on the quality of your work.
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nclear
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TW
rong tense
Error Example: The assignment *is submitted yesterday.
See Improve Your Grammar at http://www.grif f ith.edu.au/englishhelp. Click on Help Yourself Resources
> Improve your Grammar
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ord missing
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You have f orgotten something such as a preposition or verb.
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Wrong Word (or phrase)
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euthanasia rights.
You have used the wrong word. Try another word.
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ord missing
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You have f orgotten something such as a preposition or verb.
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Hedging language needed.
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Comment 13
cultural diversity
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Comment 16
Reasonably relevant introduction. However, grammar errors interf ere with meaning in places.
DQ
Direct Quote
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Comment 18
You need to base supporting evidence on the literature, not personal opinion.
NAE
Non-Academic English
Error example: She’s gonna describe something really
*cool.
The style or words are inappropriate f or an academic piece of writing.
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Irr
Irrelevant
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SRCE?
Source?
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Irrelevant
Comment 21
Citations? Personal opinion?
Comment 22
This inf ormation belongs under 'Characteristics'
TS
Weak topic sentence
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Comment 24
This inf ormation is descriptive only and not relevant. You need to be discussing WHY / HOW
high / low context cultures cause problems in communication and choice of technology. You
also need to base your work on the literature i.e. citations are needed.
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Comment 25
This inf ormation is relevant as it relates to communication problems caused by HCC/LCC.
However, where are your ref erences?
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cultural diversity.
Comment 27
Really?
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SRCE?
Source?
et al
The f irst time you use a citation, you must write it in f ull. You cannot use 'et al' f or the f irst
citation. You can only use 'et al' f or subsequent citations.
Comment 29
???
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Comment 30
Sources? Ref erences? Citations? Inf ormation based on personal opinion is irrelevant.
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Comment 32
You should be talking about the dif f erent types of trust that are usually f ound in GVTs and
why this type of trust is dif f icult to create. Some of the inf ormation you have is relevant but
you need to base your argument on the literature a lot more.
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Source?
Comment 33
How is this possible when the teams are dispersed?
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Irr
Irrelevant
Vague
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Comment 35
Solution to what? You need to make this clear.
Comment 36
You're not certain?
Comment 37
You should explain what this is.
Comment 38
Despite what f act?
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nctuation
Error example: *india will host a *united *nations conf erence in *july*
Comment 39
Weak description of Rugholt's concept of 'Third Culture'. You also need to be using more
cohesive devices and citations to demonstrate where the inf ormation is coming f rom. A lot
of it sounds as if it is personal opinion.
Comment 40
Should be on new page.
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Comment 43
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Comment 44
Sources? Citations?
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Comment 45
This is mostly irrelevant. The sub-heading title is vague, but I think you should be discussing
use of media to overcome trust issues. You could also mention the importance of explicit
procedural communication f rom managers as way to build trust.
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Comment 46
Body of report requires signif icant revision. Theref ore, the conclusion also needs to be
revised.
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