Improving CSR of Brico Devices   Improving CSR of Brico Devices Table of Contents I. Executive Summary 2 II. Introduction 3 III. Findings 3 IV. Conclusion 4 V. Recommendations 4 VI. References 5   Improving CSR of Brico Devices Executive Summary Brico Devices mark notoriety incorrect phrase has been harmed because of negative scope of industrial facility incorrect phrase, I’m not sure what you mean by this issues in the press and media. The examination by article missing CSR review group found that there are three 4 major problem issues were identified standard issues of production line recorded unclear as poor work conditions, earth environmentally unsustainable practices, risky waste transfer hones. I don’t know what ‘hones’ is/are? The purpose behind this report is to separate the eventual outcomes of CSR practices and increase key plans and recommendations for advancement. Key proposals incorporate representative fulfillment, wellbeing necessities, control sparing, propelling new strategies for reusing and waste administration and directing instructional meetings to bring issues to light of arrangement of waste to lessen the danger of natural contamination brought on by risky waste. Abdul, this is very complex and confusing language. I am not sure what you are trying to say - could you please simplify and re-write in plain English. Don’t try to be impressive, just clear. Also, briefly explain what CSR is, and why Brico Devices should care about it.   Introduction The purpose of this report is to investigate the CSR of Brico Devices. It is basically focused on to enhance the awful fame This phrase means you want to enlarge or increase the bad reputation of BD. the media’s highlighting of 4 issues: of poor working conditions, improper equipment’s, low penalty rates, dumping toxic chemicals . These were not the four problems mentioned in the case study. Focus on them - two problems under each category, so you need to highlight 8 problems in all. Findings After the examination of CSR throughout Brico Devices, eight essential issues are discovered. The Some underlying some issues will be related to individual security and wages, while the other issues are more about article missing environment. Poor working conditions Improper Equipment Brico Devices does not give employees Personal Protective Equipment (PPE) that might prompt the lack of which might lead to physical injuries, due to which the company will confront an increased absenteeism rate and compensation costs. Low pay rates There is no standard support as to pay rate what do you mean by ‘support’ for the laborers ‘workers’ is a more commonly used term which may lose staff inspiration poor phrase – perhaps you mean staff morale? and absence of intrigue incorrect term . It can influence the organization by high staff turnover and enrollment costs. Poor choice of words – staff are not ‘enrolled’ at a company. Dumping toxic chemicals in streams Dumping of risky substances squander results to in water and air defilement. Squander that end up in water bodies antagonistically poor word choice change the substance union poor English of the water. This will impact every single organic framework existing in the water. It can similarly hurt animals that drink from such dirtied water and in addition loss of bio differing qualities. No real need to detail this – the CEO would know what damage water pollution causes. It may achieve result in considerable fines and shocking notoriety publicity for the company. Squander - please check the correct meaning, you are using it incorrectly here. Lack of Electronic recycling The investigation also shows that the electronic devices are made of hardware Can they be made of anything other than ‘hardware’ or physical components? and physical components which makes recycling very tough. These are only 4 issues detailed - you were supposed to report on 8 findings, two in each category. Conclusion In the light of above discoveries obviously Brico Device has various issues that require fast execution, for example, article missing absence of sufficiently giving defensive hardware contamination control and poor framework administration I am uncertain what you mean by this – please use plain English . It is fundamental for Brico Devices to execute a CSR game plan to upgrade their work environment and facilities, social success, recover the reputation of the organization and improve efficiency and supportability I’m not sure what you mean by supportability. Recommendations • It is prescribed to keep up an adaptable roaster spelling error with a most extreme of 38hours a week as per the reasonable work government. Poor English, proofread to see if this sentence makes sense to you. What is ‘the reasonable work government?’ Lessening hours would profoundly affect in decreasing infection, stretch, non-attendance inside the organization and in the then more number of representatives must be enlisted. In any of the crisis cases if the staff are required to work additional time, they ought to be repaid with punishment rates and extra minutes. This helps the organization to increase back its notoriety for poor working conditions. Abdul, are you sure these are your words? It seems to me that you might have been cutting and pasting from various sources as some of this does not relate to Brico Devices (decreasing infection?) and it is all poorly constructed English. Please rewrite clearly and simply – trying to just say in plain English what the main points are. • Increase the wages as indicated by industry measures and even execution bases impetus reward I don’t know what you mean by this must be given to the representatives which representatives which pushes encourages the workers to be much eager more motivated and committed towards work. • It is prescribed to counsel to experts and execute different This is unclear – please write in plain language individual defensive What does PPE stand for? It is not ‘defensive’ . equipment(PPE) like eye and face insurance, utilizing muffs for ear assurance from clamors. Actualizing PPE can give a sheltered domain and avert risks, mischance to far degree. • Electronic gadgets ought to be kept off when not being used and utilization of sun oriented boards will help in sparing energy to much degree for the organization Please think carefully of what you are trying to say and then say it in clear, plain English. You should have discovered 8 problems – 2 under each of the four categories. You should have a recommendation for each of the problems you found – listed under the categories you found in Findings. • YOUR  References Working conditions and corporate social responsibility | Southern Africa Resource Watch. 2016. Working conditions and corporate social responsibility | Southern Africa Resource Watch. [ONLINE] Available at: http://www.sarwatch.org/pt-pt/node/330. [Accessed 20 December 2016].